Re: Sing Us A Song

Damien | 13/11/2011

On the whole I like the story, but I have an issue with the two of them staying in the bar to drink afterwards. Surely while they were drinking a few of the other patrons would have realised that their money had been stolen, and in such a situation you can usually rely on them to blame the stranger....

So while I like the concept of the girl distracting the whole room with her singing while her boyfriend goes around picking pockets, and especially like the moral battle she has with herself over her actions, I think towards the end the story just let itself down a little bit.

Maybe it would be a better ending if she just finished the song and then Darryl spirited her away before anyone could react or something....

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